Excellent ideas, Mais! You understand the key parts of the plot and captured the cruelty of Sally Bones very well. I can see that you’re working hard on spelling, punctuation and grammar which is good to see because sometimes working from home can feel a bit laid back.
The key corrections I would make here are the spelling of diary in “Dear Dairy” and rewriting the title with a possessive apostrophe to show that the diary belongs to SB.
For example:
“Sally Bones’ Diary” (This might sound like Sally Bones is diary)
Excellent ideas, Mais! You understand the key parts of the plot and captured the cruelty of Sally Bones very well. I can see that you’re working hard on spelling, punctuation and grammar which is good to see because sometimes working from home can feel a bit laid back.
The key corrections I would make here are the spelling of diary in “Dear Dairy” and rewriting the title with a possessive apostrophe to show that the diary belongs to SB.
For example:
“Sally Bones’ Diary” (This might sound like Sally Bones is diary)
Great work!
NICE WORK MAIS